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An unnatural smile taking place,
Of one true but lost.
A joyless laugh seemingly real,
But unknowingly different.
Carefully displayed, a convincing facade
Few can see through.

Within,
A crumbled crying world,
Reaching not past the surface.
A raging war of civil encounter,
Relentlessly unforgiving and destructive.
A cowering bloody soul,
Shattered upon the foundation and spread foreign,
It is of its own devastation.

But further within,
A lovingly happily full heart,
The true smile that contagiously glimmers,
And a happy soul,
Waiting to shine through.
Had to write a poem for english class. Picked a random one out of my gallery (Within) and redid it. So here it is. I'm not actually like this any more though, the last stanza there has broken through. This was a long time ago.
Hope it's alright. :)
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BleachingLiliesBlack Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
😊
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
What? you had to write a poem for english-class and not did a new one? Lazy basterdXD
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student Writer
it's mostly new! but yes I am. xD
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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Svitavotara Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
This is so lovely!
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student Writer
thank you :)
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frei76 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
wow, it's really beautiful :love: and I love that sense of hope at the end,
as a small hidden fire always burning, weak perhaps, but that will not die...
really a great job! :pat:
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :) Really glad you liked it. And I'm glad someone got that sense out of it.
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frei76 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
you write very well :clap:
you have the ability to show the beauty through words, that envy!
keep it up! :w00t:
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! (:
Means a lot, especially since I don't consider myself a poet :)
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