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A smile,
A laugh,
A hug.
A façade.

Within


A broken world,
A civil war,
A shattered soul,
Of its own destruction.

But further within


A full heart,
A true smile,
A happy me.
Waiting to shine.
Currently stuck in the dark. Though I must add, this is slightly exaggerated. The bright within does shine through in the right company, on the right day. However, lately had been rough.

I only added the final line as kind of a sign of hope. to show that I'm not too far gone. Originally I only used the three lines, but tried to use words to kinda cover light and happiness more universally. I'm not great at poetry so if anything needs explanation or description I'd be happy to inform.
Also, as a comment chat thing pointed out below, this did turn out a bit lighter and less, depressing, than I intended.
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oakleafninja23 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
I love it.
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad, thank you (:
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oakleafninja23 Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2012
Welcome!
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AstridSusannah Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like it.
I read it on more of a 'human nature' scale, so I felt as though you were optimistic for the future (:
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks.
Yeah I can see that... well, I didn't really plan it or anything, just kinda happened so maybe my subconscious meant it that way...
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AstridSusannah Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nah, I like it (:
No worries (:
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2012  Student Writer
:)
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
a bit lighter than what you write usually, like it;)
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Student Writer
haha, yeah I'm not great at poetry... it turned out a lot lighter than I was feeling... a lot...
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner May 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
well this one turned out lighter then first intended too [link] ,thats not unusual, but at times it is necessary...and good;)
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