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Dear World,
Hot and cold
Light and dark
Good and bad
Violent and peaceful
Strong and weak
Push and pull
World.
Many walk among you
Many lay deceased
Each and every different from another
All under you, my mother
With the complications of you
World
Where do I stand?
If I were to give you my body
But send my soul away
Would I be forgotten
Or would I be remembered?
Is my mark which stains your soil
Worth merely the memory of friends and family
Or worth the eyes and ears of hundreds
Thousands
Millions
Is my mark to be mortally bound to your beings
Or will it stand immortal among the minds of us all
Oh World
Will I achieve mere forgotteness over time?
Or will my mark achieve immortality?
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The words of a lonely soul waiting to be known.

I'm not sure how good this is, I came up with it about 5 minutes ago in the shower... it actually came in a few different idea ways things... this and stuff similar but more talking directly to specific people and stuff.
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:iconearthbound-dreaming:
This is so powerful. I absolutely loved it....
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*AutumnNight714 Jun 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)
And Thank you for favoriting :)
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:iconearthbound-dreaming:
Not a problem. Thank you for sharing it with us :)
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*AutumnNight714 Jun 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
anytime haha
well anytime I come up with one out of the blue xP
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:iconearthbound-dreaming:
You said you'd written it in 5 minutes, that's what really blew me away too. Not only was it really good, but you didn't have to think about it, it just sort of bubbled up. I feel motivated to go looking through the rest of your work now. I don't want to seem "stalky" though ha ha :P
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*AutumnNight714 Jun 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
haha go for it, that's what it's there for right?
That's how most of my poetry is written aside from "I still Love you" which took about 15 xP that one I thought about a little, but just to make it rhyme..
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I like it when poems sort of right themselves and you don't think too much on it. It's kind of the raw version of your thoughts and I like that.
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*AutumnNight714 Jun 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
me too :)
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~xXScreamingOctoberXx Jun 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow..... this is such a well-written, deep poem. I often have the same thoughts of how my memory will be immortal, and I'm glad I'm not the only one who cares about that (: You're such an amazing writer, you're lucky ^-^ Great job!
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*AutumnNight714 Jun 4, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! :) Yeah, y'know, the anti-social shy as hell child just trying to get somewhere in the world... glad you liked it, and I'm glad too that I'm not the only one.
Honestly I came up with this in like five minutes off a single line uh.. which one? oh " will my memory be immortal among the eyes and ears of this world's beings?" ... that's kinda how most of my poetry forms, from the heart and soul just building off a line or a feeling, and usually comes quick enough. I'm not that great of a writer, but I hope to get better.
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