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I'm sorry I'm not perfect
I'm sorry I can only try
But it hurts when you get angry
And you don't say why

You look at me in tears
Sometimes you almost shout
The frustration you bring upon me
The anger you bring out

I'm mad because I care
I want nothing more than to see you smile
I just want to help
And believe me
I'll be here a while

When you cry
My eyes tear at the seams
When you're sad
Rain clouds haunt my dreams

But when you laugh or smile
My lips curl up too
You still just make me so happy, I only wish I could express
How much I still love you.
This is the first poem I've written where I tried to rhyme... and the rest is pretty much self explanatory... hope you enjoy.

I EDITED THIS ONE AND POSTED THE REVISION. please check it out :) [link]
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Selbstmordesorte Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you for writing that.
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Student Writer
Oh no need to thank me. Y'know, things change, I've moved on a lot since then in my life but it's always good to remember what we've been through and keep it in mind when going through the future. That's my main goal when doing this stuff.
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HomeOfBluAndshadows Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
i love this poem, it's true expression to how one can turly feel about one's love for someone, you did a perfect job on this pice, excellent job=)
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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HomeOfBluAndshadows Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
your very welcome keep up the great writings=)
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
I'll do my best :)
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AuburnWolfy Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your writing is really good! It has the ability to actually change my facial expressions, and make me feel. Thanks for sharing this with DA. :]
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much. I'm really glad it can do that to people. That's why I'm a writer (even though mainly a fiction/fantasy novelist) is because I can touch people's emotions like that. Glad it's working. (:
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angel3433 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awwwwwwwwwww!!
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student Writer
:3
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