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I'm sorry I'm not perfect
I'm sorry I can only try
But it hurts when you get angry
And you don't say why

You look at me in tears
Sometimes you almost shout
The frustration you bring upon me
The anger you bring out

I'm mad because I care
I want nothing more than to see you smile
I just want to help
And believe me
I'll be here a while

When you cry
My eyes tear at the seams
When you're sad
Rain clouds haunt my dreams

But when you laugh or smile
My lips curl up too
You still just make me so happy, I only wish I could express
How much I still love you.
This is the first poem I've written where I tried to rhyme... and the rest is pretty much self explanatory... hope you enjoy.

I EDITED THIS ONE AND POSTED THE REVISION. please check it out :) [link]
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Selbstmordesorte Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you for writing that.
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 2, 2013  Student Writer
Oh no need to thank me. Y'know, things change, I've moved on a lot since then in my life but it's always good to remember what we've been through and keep it in mind when going through the future. That's my main goal when doing this stuff.
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HomeOfBluAndshadows Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
i love this poem, it's true expression to how one can turly feel about one's love for someone, you did a perfect job on this pice, excellent job=)
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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HomeOfBluAndshadows Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
your very welcome keep up the great writings=)
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
I'll do my best :)
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AuburnWolfy Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Your writing is really good! It has the ability to actually change my facial expressions, and make me feel. Thanks for sharing this with DA. :]
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much. I'm really glad it can do that to people. That's why I'm a writer (even though mainly a fiction/fantasy novelist) is because I can touch people's emotions like that. Glad it's working. (:
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angel3433 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awwwwwwwwwww!!
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student Writer
:3
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angel3433 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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immortallelah Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012   Writer
beautiful
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Student Writer
thanks (:
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stoopedname4 Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
yea thnx i guess hes just not going to talk to me an hang out with me anymore....bt i rly hope well get better
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Student Writer
I'm sure it will. :) good luck
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stoopedname4 Featured By Owner May 18, 2012
yea, im sorry for talk about my problems im sure yu have something better to then listen to me. an today sucked
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Student Writer
no no, that's not it, i didn't mean for it to sound like that, i'm here to help anyone...
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stoopedname4 Featured By Owner May 19, 2012
yea well he broke up with me yesterday an weve been going out for 8 an half months an i just hope he gives me another chance cuz i now kno what i did wrong an i want to fix it.
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Student Writer
Ah, yeah it was similar for my gf and I, we'd dated for 12 and a half (not trying to one up you) and we said we were gonna break up to fix ourselfs so we could love each other more, but she ended up starting to like someone else and it's been really complicated since then... but hey, I find that patients is a very good thing to have, maybe he just needs a little time.. show him you're there for him, show him you care, but don't be obsessive or smother him (that was my mistake :/) and just remind him sometime that you're sorry and willing to try and fix and if it doesnt work out then then it doesnt. ther's plenty of "fish in the sea" as most people say... I know it's not easy to hear when you're hung up on someone... but... it's true.
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stoopedname4 Featured By Owner May 20, 2012
awh im sorry an thnx again. I get to talk to him today face to face bcuz he broke up with a stupid txt1 so i hope things will go good
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Student Writer
yeah. well I wish you the best of luck with that. :)
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stoopedname4 Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
it made me cry! me an my bf are going through a rough time...
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Student Writer
Aw, I'm sorry. Hope it all gets better. :)
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irrenderNarr42 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i see.
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sophiedog18 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
great job
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 16, 2012  Student Writer
thanks :)
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Ame-Kurenai Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thats reallyyyy awesome
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks, Kelli ^^
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Ame-Kurenai Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Welcome, Mikey xD
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archergwen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Excellent!

(Not to be a Lit kid :blush:, but the parts where the rhyme scheme breaks enhances the meaning.)
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks!
And good to know. I always enjoy feedback like that cause then I know how to write better in the future. :)
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archergwen Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to pass on my learnings. :)
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MidnightDash23 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
Such emotional expression and detailed illustration. A very nice writing.

Sincerely,
Darkys Black
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
I'm glad you enjoyed it.:)
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MidnightDash23 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
-shyly- your welcome
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Writer
Why shyly? No need to be shy. :)
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MidnightDash23 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
-shyly- oh...it's just who I am...
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Writer
Me too. Believe me I'm the same way. Well you don't have to be around me or commenting on any of my stuff. :)
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MidnightDash23 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012
-scratches at ears nervously-...oh ok and cool...
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artistondeviantart Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Wow, this really speaks to me. I love it.
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AutumnNight714 Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad. :)
Thanks so much!
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artistondeviantart Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
sure
:)
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